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Ghostly Visage
PART 1
Chapter 1
I looked at my elder sister, while she was reading “The exciting world of chemistry”. Her long, black hair was covering half of the page. She had absolutely no idea what was going on in my head, and I was about to reveal it. Suddenly she closed the book and looked at me:
“What are you doing?”- She gave me one of her looks, between eagerness and anger.
“Look, um…I’m leaving. I’m not gonna tell why and where... Just tell mom, dad and the rest that I’m gone. Probably for ever...”- I wasn’t gaping at Helen, because I just couldn’t, I thought that she was going to cry, but:
“Ha ha ha!”- She gave a long chuckle, leaving me totally puzzled.
“I’m serious,”- now I looked straight into her eyes. Helen still wasn’t reacting at all as I expected. Her glasses fell to the floor and broke, because she was shaking so hard. However she still didn’t take any notice of me nor glasses. Excuse me, but I’m leaving and I really want at least one tear shed by my family.
“Fine, I’ll just leave a note.”- Those were the exact words that I told myself.
I jotted down a little text in my little sister’s diary (I know I wasn’t supposed to, but I was leaving and she would never see me again.):
Date: 19/02/2004
“My brother just hit me. I hate him, so I broke his laptop. You should’ve heard the screaming...” (My sister always writes stupid things in her log.)
“Dear family,
I’ll miss you. I’m gone. Love, Jan.
P.S: This isn’t because I blew up the school.”
My name is Janette Marion Andrews, but I clearly hate it. I wanted to change my name to Consuela. The whole ting started about two years ago. I had an unusual dream, with a ghost of a girl. She told me to go to a city, “where night and day meet”. When I heard her say those words, I woke. Then, every night I got the same dream, which took place in school. (I blew it up, because it was a nightmare.) Every single night I got a little further in the dream, and it was getting really boring. Plus, I was tired in the morning and never got a proper night sleep.
So, during the last few months, I started getting ready for leaving. First, I cut my PRECIOUS black hair, which took my family by surprise.
Then, in the night-time, I packed my things:
a) Passport, international and normal ( I’m already sixteen)
b) Money (my pocket and fair money, debit and credit cards)
c) My winter and summer clothes
d) Few favourite toys, letters and other memories.
e) The expensive edition of Lord of the Rings which I got for my Birthday.
It wasn’t a huge backpack, so I didn’t have any trouble hiding it.
I was ready to leave. It took a lot of courage. So, when I wrote the note and got dressed, took my back and my cat Shadow, I quietly went downstairs and left my normal life behind, when:
“Where on Earth are you going?”- My brother Alex grabbed my arm and I was forced to stop.
“Helen told me you were going somewhere?”
I said nothing. Well, at least Helen was listening after all.
“Well?”
“Um.Yeah, I’m going to spend the weekend with Ella.”-I had to makeup something, and going to a sleepover was the first thing on my mind.
Alex looked at me suspiciously and said:
“Fine. Of you go, BUT YOU ARE TO BE HERE BY TUESDAY!!!”- He shouted after me while I ran outside. I knew why he gave me that weird look. I was wearing my new jeans, my new top and my fake leather jacket.
One last time I looked at the house where I spend all of my life. Then I left.
Призрачное видение или Who's power is it???
Призрачное видение или Who's power is it???
Последний раз редактировалось Kationa 07 янв 2005 10:56, всего редактировалось 4 раза.
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Chapter 2
I had no place to go to. The world is dangerous, and even if I did have some special power, it would NEVER work. I had £345.49 cash in my pockets (very dangerous to walk around with this amount) and I had absolutely NO idea where to search for this bloody city! For the first time in my life I realized I was wrong.
And when I climbed on my bike, clutched to Shadow and hit the Road, this huge stone landed on my heart once more.
I went to that place where the names are changed. If I were to run away for ever, I would have to suspect my family searching for me. The thought of my family burned my heart and I swallowed my tears back. For my name, I couldn’t come up with anything better that Hannah Goldleaf (Consuella-SUCKS!) Well it is better that Janette Marion Rose Kathryn Andrews! (Duh)
Then, I was riding to Heathrow for nearly a whole night. There is a privilege in living near London and it is getting to Heathrow earlier that anyone else.
Luckily, I arrived early, just as I suspected, so there was time to buy a ticket somewhere, where I could start the search for the city.
So I took more money from my account, took out my credit cards and went to the nearest Pizza Hut to buy myself breakfast. My day was about to begin.
“There is a ticket to Wellington and it costs £399.99, miss...Um-miss? Are you going to buy it?”
I guess I dozed off, and woke up falling down, when a tall, handsome guy helped me up.
“Thanks!”-I yawned. This was really embarrassing, and I didn’t notice how hat guy...disappeared.
I had a reasonable amount of money, so I wasn’t afraid of spending it. I had 3 accounts of my own, so it wasn’t a problem.
The sales woman looked at me suspiciously, as I handed her my Visa.
I had everything that I could possibly need, except a mobile. I was lucky, because “Carphone Warehouse” was open. As I went to the escalator, I felt someone’s eyes on me. As I turned around I saw the handsome guy from before. But his yes were RED. When I looked at him for the last time, he disappeared.
It took me ages to find a mobile. After choosing one, I went to get a licence to travel with a pet. I pretended to cry, so they told me I could get one on such a short notice, considering I had an hour till the plane. They gave me and Shadow few injections. The only things that went wrong, were the cost of the licence (£450.00) and I also had to buy a cage for Shadow to travel in. (Now I understood, that I was NOT supposed to spend all money.)
After buying the licence, I went to my gate; however two blokes stopped me and told me to hand over my money. Who would’ve thought, that there were thugs in an airport? No-one was around to help me except Shadow. She scratched one guy’s face, while I felt something in my palm. I was a tiny sphere, which I threw at the other person. Believe it or not, it paralyzed him...
This trip was harder than I thought. Maybe now, I’ll get rid of that dream. As I ran from the thugs, two really serious men stopped me just as I was about to get on the plane. I stuffed Shadow into the cage and showed them the licence. I was about to make the biggest turn of my life...
Chapter 2
I had no place to go to. The world is dangerous, and even if I did have some special power, it would NEVER work. I had £345.49 cash in my pockets (very dangerous to walk around with this amount) and I had absolutely NO idea where to search for this bloody city! For the first time in my life I realized I was wrong.
And when I climbed on my bike, clutched to Shadow and hit the Road, this huge stone landed on my heart once more.
I went to that place where the names are changed. If I were to run away for ever, I would have to suspect my family searching for me. The thought of my family burned my heart and I swallowed my tears back. For my name, I couldn’t come up with anything better that Hannah Goldleaf (Consuella-SUCKS!) Well it is better that Janette Marion Rose Kathryn Andrews! (Duh)
Then, I was riding to Heathrow for nearly a whole night. There is a privilege in living near London and it is getting to Heathrow earlier that anyone else.
Luckily, I arrived early, just as I suspected, so there was time to buy a ticket somewhere, where I could start the search for the city.
So I took more money from my account, took out my credit cards and went to the nearest Pizza Hut to buy myself breakfast. My day was about to begin.
“There is a ticket to Wellington and it costs £399.99, miss...Um-miss? Are you going to buy it?”
I guess I dozed off, and woke up falling down, when a tall, handsome guy helped me up.
“Thanks!”-I yawned. This was really embarrassing, and I didn’t notice how hat guy...disappeared.
I had a reasonable amount of money, so I wasn’t afraid of spending it. I had 3 accounts of my own, so it wasn’t a problem.
The sales woman looked at me suspiciously, as I handed her my Visa.
I had everything that I could possibly need, except a mobile. I was lucky, because “Carphone Warehouse” was open. As I went to the escalator, I felt someone’s eyes on me. As I turned around I saw the handsome guy from before. But his yes were RED. When I looked at him for the last time, he disappeared.
It took me ages to find a mobile. After choosing one, I went to get a licence to travel with a pet. I pretended to cry, so they told me I could get one on such a short notice, considering I had an hour till the plane. They gave me and Shadow few injections. The only things that went wrong, were the cost of the licence (£450.00) and I also had to buy a cage for Shadow to travel in. (Now I understood, that I was NOT supposed to spend all money.)
After buying the licence, I went to my gate; however two blokes stopped me and told me to hand over my money. Who would’ve thought, that there were thugs in an airport? No-one was around to help me except Shadow. She scratched one guy’s face, while I felt something in my palm. I was a tiny sphere, which I threw at the other person. Believe it or not, it paralyzed him...
This trip was harder than I thought. Maybe now, I’ll get rid of that dream. As I ran from the thugs, two really serious men stopped me just as I was about to get on the plane. I stuffed Shadow into the cage and showed them the licence. I was about to make the biggest turn of my life...
Могу ли я, гавно ли я... а - Магнолия!!
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Chapter 3
When I finally sat down, something strange happened. The plane was ready to take off, when the power broke and everybody started panicking. I closed my eyes, because it was impossible to stand the noise level. Shadow got out of her cage and settled down on my lap, despite all the shouting, the cat began to purr! I felt dizzy...I fell asleep.
I had a different dream this time. I was standing in the middle of a desert and half of the sky above was night and the other one was daylight. Beyond the stars I could see giants, starring at me. I began to run around, however it was as if I got trapped in a paperweight...WHAT?!? A PAPERWEIGHT!?!
Suddenly, someone shook my shoulders and I awoke.
“Miss, are you alright?”- A stewardess was obviously worried. But why? I was fine...
“Oh yes, I feel perfect. Are we...”-We were already up above the ocean.
“It’s nothing. Thanks a lot.”
I didn’t have much to do in 24 hours but watch “Harry Potter” and “Lord of the Rings”, including the lunch times.
When the trip was finally over, and I got of the plane, I realized that I missed an important bit of the journey: I didn’t think about where I will go. New city, new people, new everything. First of all, I went to an old library and looked at ALL ancient books. I didn’t find anything for a really long while, but then I discovered a huge book made out of parchment (Urgh!) It was hand written in Italian, which was lucky for me, because Italian is my second language. But turned out, the book wasn’t old. It was just in a bed condition. I was amazed. It was Italian. Simply Italian. It was hard to read, so I started with the contents. The penmanship was even worse than mine. The text looked a if it was written in a hurry:
1) Sculls 1
2) Magical potions 104
3) Magical orbing 706
4) Magic cities 5098
Finally, I was getting somewhere. Maybe that city was here. I looked at the particular page, and believe me; it took a lot of time to read 72 pages.
“OK, city of Life, city of Death, Time, Day, Night, City where the day and the night meet...”- I mumbled the words that made my heart jump. I found it!!!
“Bless the person who wrote this book! Well, perhaps not...” I said the last bit really loudly, as I started reading 3 boring pages DESCRIBING the city.
I was already dozing of, when I heard a loud “WHAM” behind me. Luckily, there was no one here I turned around and saw three masked warriors. They grabbed me, and the last thing I heard, was a plaintivement «Miay!» and while I clutched to the book we disappeared in the darkness...
Chapter 3
When I finally sat down, something strange happened. The plane was ready to take off, when the power broke and everybody started panicking. I closed my eyes, because it was impossible to stand the noise level. Shadow got out of her cage and settled down on my lap, despite all the shouting, the cat began to purr! I felt dizzy...I fell asleep.
I had a different dream this time. I was standing in the middle of a desert and half of the sky above was night and the other one was daylight. Beyond the stars I could see giants, starring at me. I began to run around, however it was as if I got trapped in a paperweight...WHAT?!? A PAPERWEIGHT!?!
Suddenly, someone shook my shoulders and I awoke.
“Miss, are you alright?”- A stewardess was obviously worried. But why? I was fine...
“Oh yes, I feel perfect. Are we...”-We were already up above the ocean.
“It’s nothing. Thanks a lot.”
I didn’t have much to do in 24 hours but watch “Harry Potter” and “Lord of the Rings”, including the lunch times.
When the trip was finally over, and I got of the plane, I realized that I missed an important bit of the journey: I didn’t think about where I will go. New city, new people, new everything. First of all, I went to an old library and looked at ALL ancient books. I didn’t find anything for a really long while, but then I discovered a huge book made out of parchment (Urgh!) It was hand written in Italian, which was lucky for me, because Italian is my second language. But turned out, the book wasn’t old. It was just in a bed condition. I was amazed. It was Italian. Simply Italian. It was hard to read, so I started with the contents. The penmanship was even worse than mine. The text looked a if it was written in a hurry:
1) Sculls 1
2) Magical potions 104
3) Magical orbing 706
4) Magic cities 5098
Finally, I was getting somewhere. Maybe that city was here. I looked at the particular page, and believe me; it took a lot of time to read 72 pages.
“OK, city of Life, city of Death, Time, Day, Night, City where the day and the night meet...”- I mumbled the words that made my heart jump. I found it!!!
“Bless the person who wrote this book! Well, perhaps not...” I said the last bit really loudly, as I started reading 3 boring pages DESCRIBING the city.
I was already dozing of, when I heard a loud “WHAM” behind me. Luckily, there was no one here I turned around and saw three masked warriors. They grabbed me, and the last thing I heard, was a plaintivement «Miay!» and while I clutched to the book we disappeared in the darkness...
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Прочл-прочи и вот что я в болкноте настроичла и теперь выкладываю 
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Я прочла таки))))) 2 первые главки, правда...
И... мне понравилось.
Мне понравился очень красивый английский, интересные (пусть и пока непонятные и чуть запутанные) описания. Я в инглише непрофессионал и иногда недопонимаю фразы, но тут поняла абсолютно все. И, насколько я вижу, грамматика на высоте. Молодец. Порадовало, что героиня помимо важных предметов, взяла с собой книгу "Властелин Колец".
И, самое на мой взгляд, лучшее - что героиня сама хочет поменять свою жизнь. На это способны немногие и не каждому это удается. Пожелаем ей удачи)))
*и, копируя следующий текст в Ворд, удаляемся читать, а потом говорим: "Проды!"*
Ах, да - ещё по поводу Pizza Hut, а я то думала, что они с Италии пошли))) Ан нет, с Англии)) Бум знать, куда ходим куцать)))
:Я прочла таки))))) 2 первые главки, правда...
И... мне понравилось
. Мне понравился очень красивый английский, интересные (пусть и пока непонятные и чуть запутанные) описания. Я в инглише непрофессионал и иногда недопонимаю фразы, но тут поняла абсолютно все. И, насколько я вижу, грамматика на высоте. Молодец. Порадовало, что героиня помимо важных предметов, взяла с собой книгу "Властелин Колец".
И, самое на мой взгляд, лучшее - что героиня сама хочет поменять свою жизнь. На это способны немногие и не каждому это удается. Пожелаем ей удачи)))
*и, копируя следующий текст в Ворд, удаляемся читать, а потом говорим: "Проды!"*
Ах, да - ещё по поводу Pizza Hut, а я то думала, что они с Италии пошли))) Ан нет, с Англии)) Бум знать, куда ходим куцать)))
Выпускница Гриффиндора и Лучшая ученица 2004-2005 уч.года
Член попечительского совета
Liberté, Égalité, Fraternité
Член попечительского совета
Liberté, Égalité, Fraternité
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Может переведу, но только когда я закончу саму книгу.
Поповоду глав: уж какие получились. Когда я закончу книгу и переделаю её, тогда будут большие главы.
Chapter 4
“Janette, wake up now.”- I heard an overpowering, cold female voice. I expected it to be mom, because it was exactly like she sounded in the mornings, when I was late. I thought I would wake up in my bedroom, with Shadow biting my fingers, but instead I saw a tiny grey room and my backpack by the huge metal door. I screamed.
“Janette stand up NOW.”-It was the same voice of he woman. I looked around and saw a woman with really unusual but stern face.
“Janette, I am Queen ShadoEnn, ruler of the city of Teres, and the Keeper of the doors of this region. I know, someone has been sending those dreams to you. If you don’t get in my way, I shall not harm you. So tell me what I want.”
“What DO you want from me? Where the hell am I?”-I forgot about my politeness completely.
“What are your dreams about? What powers do you have? If you do not answer....”-Queen’s voice got colder and I felt shivers up my spine.
“I have no idea what you are talking about? I have no powers, I don’t have weird dreams, AND GET ME THE HELL OUTA HERE!”-If I had to lie, I had to make a scene.
“Don’t you dare lie to me, girl!”- The Queen grabbed my arm. It started to hurt. Her eyes suddenly turned bright-red, the exact colour of blood...
I jumped up in fury and fear.
“Leave me alone!”-I shoved the Italian book under the bed, until that ShadoEnn noticed it. Then the panicking started. I clutched the door. It was locked. (Always the obvious!) I hammered on it. My nostrils began to flare. I began to burn. I felt Queen’s eyes perish my brain. Then I remembered about...
“SHADOW! Where is my cat? What did you do to her?”- I was screaming and “Her Majesty” answered:
“Not to worry. I have her. All you have to do is answer my questions.”
This was the moment of the dilemma. If I didn’t tell the truth, Shadow would die and I would never forgive myself. I do not remember the moment well, but I recall saying partly the truth, that I heard the words about some city. All I could think of. The answer to my story was:
“I do not think you are lying. I shall check on you every hour, 24/7. Don’t even think about escaping. I have ears and eyes everywhere...”-The Queen disappeared. It felt as if she was still here. This was a terrible moment. Why did I ever leave home? Why did I ever leave my family?
Then, despite my anger, fear and defeat, my thoughts turned towards the way “The ruler of the city” disappeared. She shimmered. Not orbed, but shimmered. I knew the difference between those things. But how? I was ordinary...I needed a brainstorm. I was to learn how to be invisible. Then, I could shimmer out of here with her...AND I COULD BE FREE! Or I could learn to shimmer...
For few hours I kept on reading the book. The thing that sucked he most was that I had to hide the book every single hour. Luckily, the parts about shimmering ,orbing, magical abilities and invisibility were the easiest. In the fourth hour I already knew how to understand the feeling, when someone was orbing here. And that feeling came to me immediately. I his the book under the bed. But nobody entered...
“Miaow!”
I jumper up. It was Shadow. She landed on my knees and began to purr. That “Miaow” scared me to death. I scratched Shadow’s ear and continued to read...
...For five whole hours.
At least that worked for the best. I knew I had some powers, but now I felt stronger, better, more powerful. I could conjure fireballs. However, all 753 pages said nothing about how to try shimmering. I had to be stronger. So I kept on reading...
Поповоду глав: уж какие получились. Когда я закончу книгу и переделаю её, тогда будут большие главы.
Chapter 4
“Janette, wake up now.”- I heard an overpowering, cold female voice. I expected it to be mom, because it was exactly like she sounded in the mornings, when I was late. I thought I would wake up in my bedroom, with Shadow biting my fingers, but instead I saw a tiny grey room and my backpack by the huge metal door. I screamed.
“Janette stand up NOW.”-It was the same voice of he woman. I looked around and saw a woman with really unusual but stern face.
“Janette, I am Queen ShadoEnn, ruler of the city of Teres, and the Keeper of the doors of this region. I know, someone has been sending those dreams to you. If you don’t get in my way, I shall not harm you. So tell me what I want.”
“What DO you want from me? Where the hell am I?”-I forgot about my politeness completely.
“What are your dreams about? What powers do you have? If you do not answer....”-Queen’s voice got colder and I felt shivers up my spine.
“I have no idea what you are talking about? I have no powers, I don’t have weird dreams, AND GET ME THE HELL OUTA HERE!”-If I had to lie, I had to make a scene.
“Don’t you dare lie to me, girl!”- The Queen grabbed my arm. It started to hurt. Her eyes suddenly turned bright-red, the exact colour of blood...
I jumped up in fury and fear.
“Leave me alone!”-I shoved the Italian book under the bed, until that ShadoEnn noticed it. Then the panicking started. I clutched the door. It was locked. (Always the obvious!) I hammered on it. My nostrils began to flare. I began to burn. I felt Queen’s eyes perish my brain. Then I remembered about...
“SHADOW! Where is my cat? What did you do to her?”- I was screaming and “Her Majesty” answered:
“Not to worry. I have her. All you have to do is answer my questions.”
This was the moment of the dilemma. If I didn’t tell the truth, Shadow would die and I would never forgive myself. I do not remember the moment well, but I recall saying partly the truth, that I heard the words about some city. All I could think of. The answer to my story was:
“I do not think you are lying. I shall check on you every hour, 24/7. Don’t even think about escaping. I have ears and eyes everywhere...”-The Queen disappeared. It felt as if she was still here. This was a terrible moment. Why did I ever leave home? Why did I ever leave my family?
Then, despite my anger, fear and defeat, my thoughts turned towards the way “The ruler of the city” disappeared. She shimmered. Not orbed, but shimmered. I knew the difference between those things. But how? I was ordinary...I needed a brainstorm. I was to learn how to be invisible. Then, I could shimmer out of here with her...AND I COULD BE FREE! Or I could learn to shimmer...
For few hours I kept on reading the book. The thing that sucked he most was that I had to hide the book every single hour. Luckily, the parts about shimmering ,orbing, magical abilities and invisibility were the easiest. In the fourth hour I already knew how to understand the feeling, when someone was orbing here. And that feeling came to me immediately. I his the book under the bed. But nobody entered...
“Miaow!”
I jumper up. It was Shadow. She landed on my knees and began to purr. That “Miaow” scared me to death. I scratched Shadow’s ear and continued to read...
...For five whole hours.
At least that worked for the best. I knew I had some powers, but now I felt stronger, better, more powerful. I could conjure fireballs. However, all 753 pages said nothing about how to try shimmering. I had to be stronger. So I kept on reading...
Могу ли я, гавно ли я... а - Магнолия!!
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